Style Concerns Edit
- Needs Citations in Description for
amber eyes, huge,and battle-scarred muzzle. Needs some quotes.Added a new quote and a main quote, but another still wouldn't hurt, I think.220.127.116.11 22:14, April 6, 2011 (UTC)
Mentor needs to be cited. Apprentices need to be cited and more info.Emmarose26 22:57, August 23, 2010 (UTC)
Spoiler End tag not used.Eulalia459678(Salamandastron) 18:52, 14 December 2007 (UTC)
History needs to be divided by bookEulalia459678(Salamandastron) 18:52, 14 December 2007 (UTC)
History needs to be checked for completenessEu(Talk!Contribs) 23:51, 2 May 2008 (UTC)
Needs proper spoiler-free starting blurb.Eu(Talk!Contribs) 23:51, 2 May 2008 (UTC)
He needs a kit verision18.104.22.168 22:08, May 16, 2010 (UTC)Bluemist
It got approved, it's up now. For future reference, please know that members of Project Charart will get to it, and it is not neccesary to post it on the talk page. WillowheartWhere's the candy? 02:10, September 29, 2010 (UTC)
Place of No Stars? Edit
He is in the Place of No Stars, but that's not really an affiliation in the same way a Clan is, it's more of just a residence. He was a ThunderClan Prisoner when he died, so that's his most recent affiliation for that meaning of it. insane brick'd 23:49, June 7, 2010 (UTC)
Alright, it's just since it says Tigerstar is in the place of no stars on his page, I thought it should be for Brokenstar.
Another note: It should be noted that in Battles of the Clans Tui made the mistake of calling Brokenstar/tail a "massive black tom with clouded eyes" :/ Coontail 16:29, June 8, 2010 (UTC)
Yes he is in the Place of no Stars but I have a question, does anyone think that if Brokenstar had fallen in love with a she-cat in his clan do you think that he would have been as cruel or a better leader than we all thought, I think personally he would been a lot softer and followed the warrior code, honestly he probably would have been one of the best warriors ever and would have been loyal to the warrior code, loyal to his clan, loyal to his mate, forgiving of his foster mother, and probably would have lived a normal warrior life.22.214.171.124 03:06, April 27, 2011 (UTC)Silverthistle
Kit Character art? Edit
Since he was seen as a kit in Secrets of the Clans, shouldn't he have kit Character art? Coontail 03:45, June 14, 2010 (UTC)
Pelt Colour Edit
I get the horrible feeling that his pelt colour has been changed in the later books from a brown tabby to a black cat. 'his night-colored pelt' is mentioned in Fading Echoes on page 3 and I remember reading a couple of other mentions of this as well. Not to mention the above in BOTC. (I cannot verify this however). What should be done about it? I'm not sure it is a simple mistake, rather that they have changed it... -- 12:53, July 19, 2010 (UTC)
he is a brown tabby but she forgot about it and said black tom so their is no need to change itEmmarose26 22:55, August 23, 2010 (UTC)
This is going to sound ridiculous, but suppose if being in the Dark Forest changed his pelt color from brown tabby to night black. I know, it sounded weird...
If you have read the short story "How TigerClan got there stripes" this will make sense. TigerClan had to stay in the forest and see no light. So, maybe just maybe since Brokenstar was in the forest longer then them his whole pelt changed.
Since Brokenstar died as BrokenTAIL and was known as BrokenTAIL when he was a rogue, the most current position he was in...should we rename his article to Brokentail? EarthbenderTawny Style! 13:10, August 24, 2010 (UTC)
Forest of Secrets.He never really retired, he was a prisoner and the other Clans didn't realized that ThunderClan made him an elder. Sagepelt 15:12, February 19, 2012 (UTC)Sagepelt
I think him and the other Place of No Stars cats called him Brokenstar. Also maybe Bluestar couldn't change his name without Brokenstar giving up a life.
Brokentail as a prisoner? Edit
Brokenstar born before Bluestar?Edit
Was Brokenstar born before Bluestar or after because he was an apprentice in Bluestars Prophecy. It says that a apprentice Brokenpaw got in a fight. Moomzee 20:48, January 8, 2011 (UTC)
No, I don't think so, because when Bluestar went to her first Gathering, Yellowfang was still a warrior Halfpelt 07:05, January 10, 2011 (UTC)
I think he needs a citation for being blind. Crystalstar999 11:15, February 22, 2011 (UTC)
He isn't blind 126.96.36.199 23:19, April 7, 2012 (UTC) ~Amberleaves~
Just wondering...shouldn't Brokenstar be an elder in his main charart? When he died in Forest of Secrets, he was listed as a thunderClan Elder. ∗ Mistystar ∗ Trust the Fire Within... 22:03, March 22, 2011 (UTC)
I've noticed that he is listed as Brokentail in a couple of the articles. Isn't he still Brokenstar technically? .Skystar. 22:45, March 22, 2011 (UTC)
when he got to ThunderClan he was no longer ShadowClan's leader, so they changed his name back to Brokentail, since he was listed as an elder of ThunderClan. ∗ Mistystar ∗ Trust the Fire Within... 22:47, March 22, 2011 (UTC)
Mistystar, this is a good question. They still call him Brokenstar in the Dark Forest...but when he died, he was a ThunderClan elder. Hrm... I'm sorta confused about this myself.00:01, March 23, 2011 (UTC)
Yeah, but that might just be because he prefers to think of himself as the ShadowClan leader. Still, he should be an elder because Dark Forest cats end up there after they die in the same rank they were when they died. ∗ Mistystar ∗ Trust the Fire Within... 00:05, March 23, 2011 (UTC)
You're right. Let's see what some of the others think - I'm leaning towards putting up his Elder charart, myself. You are right about the Dark Forest cats, though. I keep forgetting that. *facepalm*00:10, March 23, 2011 (UTC)
imo i think he should have went to starclan
me tooButthead4 23:06, April 27, 2011 (UTC)Butthead4
So shouldn't he be called Brokentail in the article then? .Skystar. 21:19, March 23, 2011 (UTC)
- Well, he's still called Brokenstar in the books...but... I really don't know.. 21:24, March 23, 2011 (UTC)
- I think his article should be called Brokenstar but his charart should be elder. ∗ Mistystar ∗ Trust the Fire Within... 21:35, March 23, 2011 (UTC)
Do they just not call him by his leader name then? .Skystar. 23:10, March 23, 2011 (UTC)
A matter of opinion then, I guess. .Skystar. 21:10, March 30, 2011 (UTC)
In his description,it's not listed that he has blind eyes.Should I add that?
I think he should be listed as Brokentail in the article. An d there should be an image for prisonor and Dark Forest cats
- I've been gone a while and have no idea how the new reference tags work, so I just wanted to say that the last trivia fact about why Yellowfang named Brokentail can be found in Secrets of the Clans, page 71 Night Fall 18:17, June 21, 2011 (UTC)
shouldn't his discription say he's blind because he was blind when he died, and can he see in the dark forest because he trains with cat there?-Redfern 13:51, July 4, 2011 (UTC)
When he was killed Ferncloud, he was described as black in TLH. I only have the Kindle e-book and don't know the real page number. Can someone cite that and add it..Boos Dinosaurs on a Spaceship! 11:08, May 8, 2012 (UTC)
Family tree? Edit
On his family tree, there are two seperate boxes for his two sisters. Wouldn't it be simpler to just put one female box and say, "Two kits"?Amberflower (talk) 21:39, February 5, 2013 (UTC)Amberflower of WindClan
Trivia bit Edit
In the trivia it says that Yellowfang's dialogue prior to killing Brokentail suggests that he never knew who his father was. I never got that impression--the line "your own father" sounded to me like something she added for emphasis, not like she was telling him something he never knew. He certainly doesn't react like this is new information. Furthermore, in Into the Wild, p. 261, the following exchange clearly illustrates that Brokenstar knew who his father was:
Brokenstar: "I never thought you would be harder to kill than my father!"
Yellowfang: "You killed Raggedstar?"
Brokenstar: "You found his body. Didn't you recognize my fur between his claws?"
188.8.131.52 19:11, April 3, 2013 (UTC)Dawnclaw
It's referring to the original arc when it's first revealed who Brokenstar's parents are. Back then Brokentail states outright that he has no parents and Yellowfang reveals to him that his father was Raggedstar, meaning he didn't know that beforehand. Shelly For a limited time only 19:57, April 3, 2013 (UTC)
That quote was from the Original Series, from before Yellowfang kills him. Throughout the entire Original Series, I never once got the impression that Brokenstar didn't know who his father was. The way I see it, when he said "I have no kin" he meant he had no living kin. Yellowfang's response, "Your kin has been closer to you than you ever dreamed. I'm your mother," seems to fit this--she only contradicts his supposed lack of a mother, no mention of his dead father or sisters. And later on, Yellowfang says "When you were a young warrior, I was so proud of you. And then you murdered Raggedstar. Your own father. You killed kits of our Clan, and made me take the blame. You would have destroyed our Clan completely." She is listing horrible things Brokentail has done--to me, the bit mentioning Raggedstar as his father sounds like further explanation of how horrible Brokentail is--"You didn't just kill your leader, you killed your father, making you even worse of a cat". Either way, it does not state that Brokentail didn't know that Raggedstar was his father, and in Into the Wild he clearly states that he did.184.108.40.206 21:29, April 3, 2013 (UTC)Dawnclaw
Something else I noticed; on Brokenstar's page of Cats of the Clans, Rock states that when he killed Raggedstar, he "unknowingly sent his own father to StarClan (or something like that; I can't find my copy of the book)." However, from the overwhelming evidence in both Into the Wild and especially Yellowfang's Secret, it is obvious he knew that he killed his father. Bluestar Leaf flying in the wind 22:12, April 3, 2013 (UTC)