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Morningflower- Declined

[[File:Morningflower (elder).PNG]]

My second, tortie, and my first elder. The elder blanks show up black for me, can someone fix that? I fixed up this one, though. Tell me what you think of it. --Mlns tlkC 14:33, 30 May 2009 (UTC)

She looks good, but i think you might need a little more ginger fur. She looks too dark, and I think it's because of the black. But, otherwise, it's good. ;) --MUMBLE785 19:55, 30 May 2009 (UTC)

Also, the separation between the white and the black on the neck looks unnatural. Play around with the shape a bit more, or extend the white up into the face and make those common white-face markings. Other than that, and what Mumble just said, this is really good. -- Dawnfeather  02:13, 31 May 2009 (UTC)

Reuploded and changed the neck black to white and ginger connection. Better? --Mallinois Herding Talk 21:21, 3 June 2009 (UTC)

It is better. I think the ear pink, although it is the right colour is slightly too big for her ear, especially as the fur is black.  Sandy Talk! 18:02, 4 June 2009 (UTC)

Done, though it may take a while to show up. --Mallinois Herding Talk 19:24, 4 June 2009 (UTC)

I think that you should extend the white on the neck up onto the face, the way the is common amoung cats. also, the ginger patch on the front shoulder is an awkard shape. -- Dawnfeather  01:57, 5 June 2009 (UTC)

The white is extended to her face, but it may take a while to show up... --Mallinois Herding Talk 14:37, 6 June 2009 (UTC)

Instead of making an upward arch with the white into the face area, level with the eye, drop in down a bit and make it arch the other way. Also, extend the white that is on the face in a tendril up the nose. -- Dawnfeather  23:52, 6 June 2009 (UTC)

I totally agree with Dawnfeather. Just make those changes and it should be ready, if it looks good. --Bramble My Realm 16:12, 11 June 2009 (UTC)

Done, but I like the old version better... --Mallinois Herding Talk 11:23, 12 June 2009 (UTC)

I love this Mal!  Sandy Talk! 11:42, 12 June 2009 (UTC)

There is a gray lne on the muzzle. -- Dawnfeather  07:05, 13 June 2009 (UTC)

I don't see a grey line... just shading. Are there any more comments otherwise this should be approved  Sandy Talk! 13:20, 16 June 2009 (UTC)

(M) - There's a chunk out of her head right before her ear that's bothering me. Mosswisker&Stealthfire 22:18, 16 June 2009 (UTC)

There is also a little black dot inside the muzzle. -- Dawnfeather  06:13, 17 June 2009 (UTC)

I like this Mal. Sorry for not commenting before. The thing is, the head / upper body seems a little busy compared to the rest? Add another patch or two to the back.-- Darkhallows  Lair 08:48, 18 June 2009 (UTC)

Also, you might want to work on this again soon. It's been a while.-- Darkhallows  Lair 07:50, 20 June 2009 (UTC)

Declined due to lack of work.-- Darkhallows  Lair 05:24, 23 June 2009 (UTC)

Echosong - Declined

[[File:Wiki_echosong.png]] This is my second character art, and I'm rather pleased with it. I know that some of the outlines are rather blurry, but is there anything else?

The ear pink needs blending and it needs to be neatened up as some of the areas are very blurry, even inside the lineart Sandy Talk! 16:55, 12 June 2009 (UTC) [edited 12th: didn't mean to write in caps]

What Sandy said, and please sign with four ~s.Warrior♥Warrior's Palace 18:19, 12 June 2009 (UTC)

I think she needs a bit more shading, and there is a lot of blurring outside the line art which needs to be fixed. The eye colour is hard to see. -- Dawnfeather  11:33, 14 June 2009 (UTC)

Beautiful! I am in love with those tabby markings! They're so soft. *tries to reach and touch one* The only problem I see is that there is coloring/shading outside the lineart. -- Goldencloud  17:18, 14 June 2009 (UTC)

Who made it? Lavastream, SunsetClan's Medicine Cat! 23:55, 14 June 2009 (UTC)

Mistyfur, I think it's Smokeberry's  Sandy Talk! 08:25, 15 June 2009 (UTC)

Thanks Sandy! Yeah, there's to much color out of the lines. Lavastream, SunsetClan's Medicine Cat! 17:46, 15 June 2009 (UTC)

There is a lot of smudging outside of the line art. You need to fix that.Minnowclaw 23:59, 16 June 2009 (UTC)Minnowclaw

Blend the ear pink and maybe darken it a shade. ;]--Warrior♥Warrior's Palace 17:38, 18 June 2009 (UTC)

Yes, also try adding some dimension to the nerbs by using different shades of green and take a look at the hing leg tabby markings as a couple of them are very dark  Sandy Talk! 19:09, 18 June 2009 (UTC)

If this isn't worked on within the next day it'll have to be declined Smokeberry as it hasn't been touched for ten days. Sad really as it's really beautiful  Sandy Talk! 15:05, 22 June 2009 (UTC)

Declined due to lack of work. Please feel free to resubmit when you've made the necessary improvements.  Sandy Talk! 11:51, 23 June 2009 (UTC)

Queen Blanks- Withdrawn by User

[[File:Longhair Queen.PNG]] [[File:Shorthair Queen.PNG]]

Yeh, I know they kind of suck. They look like the other blanks, in the good old sitting fashion. Sure doesn't beat the other Queen blanks that were submitted, but it was my first try (Plus I didn't realize someone else submitted until I had finished, and didn't want them to go to waste). I used MS Paint. Please, criticize. ;D - Sandiwolf 

The shests puff out heaps. Also, the hind legs are too small. I also think that it is against PCA etiquite to post something that someone else already has. (I changed my sig again) - Dawnfeather talk! 10:53, 23 June 2009 (UTC)

Oh, er.. Sorry about that. Still new here. x3 I'll take this into mind. Should I take it down? Also, how can I post the image regularly, without it being adjusted to the right in the square? EDIT: I fixed it. Yayyyy. - Sandiwolf 

In my honest opinion I think it would be best to take these down. You already have two other sets of blanks to work on and Reedshine which is more than enough trouble for anyone! These are good but need some work to get the proportions right and Bramble had already started work on editing Melonlemon's blanks when you put these up. Just my opinion though :)  Sandy Talk! 18:31, 23 June 2009 (UTC)

Patchfoot - Withdrawn


I wish Patchfoot would've had a bigger role in Firestar's Quest, I think I could've grown to like him. I hope I did the patches okay, I didn't use a reference on him. I should try something other than warriors...I will after I get Brindleface posted. -- Goldencloud  23:44, 13 June 2009 (UTC)

EDIT1 Un-squared patch on upper foreleg. haha now it looks like Scooby-Doo's leg. And blurred head patch. -- Goldencloud  17:14, 14 June 2009 (UTC)
EDIT2 Blurred Scooby-Doo patch.  Goldencloud  00:14, 16 June 2009 (UTC)
EDIT3 I smoothed out the black on the head, but it's not showing up. :( Let me play with it a bit... Goldencloud 22:17, 21 June 2009 (UTC)

Wow, this is really good! -- Dawnfeather  23:46, 13 June 2009 (UTC)

Dawnfeather :D Thank you! I don't see what's so great about it, but if you see something I guess I'm glad! -- Goldencloud  04:33, 14 June 2009 (UTC)

One of the patches is sort of... square. -- Darkhallows  Lair 04:44, 14 June 2009 (UTC)

This is really good. The patch on the head needs neatening up a bit though as the edges are really smudgy.  Sandy Talk! 13:38, 14 June 2009 (UTC)

Darkhallows Acknowledged.
Sandy Thanks! I smudged the patches then went over them with the blur tool, I must have missed the head.
-- Goldencloud  17:14, 14 June 2009 (UTC)

Mrrow? Anything else I need to work on?  Goldencloud  01:30, 15 June 2009 (UTC)

(M) - That black patch on his looks less blurred than the other patches. Try blurring it just a teensy bit more. But this looks aweome! Mosswisker&Stealthfire 19:33, 15 June 2009 (UTC)

Mosswisker I blurred the patch! Thanks for pointing that out. I guess when I rounded it out I forgot to re-blur it. :D
Goldencloud 02:01, 16 June 2009 (UTC)

Hello? Anyone there? Does this need more help? Goldencloud 23:07, 16 June 2009 (UTC)

Extend the black patch on the head a little along the muzzle so it looks less squared. That's about it. Great job! --Bramble My Realm 02:24, 17 June 2009 (UTC)

Bramble I'm surprised this hasn't been taken down from lack of work! Will do, Bramble! Goldencloud 21:59, 21 June 2009 (UTC)

I normally give about a week before it's taken down. No need to worry. :) --Bramble My Realm 22:07, 21 June 2009 (UTC)

teh shoulder and back patches aern't blurred as much as the rest. -- Minnowberry   Dawnfeather's Den  10:45, 22 June 2009 (UTC)

I am going to withdraw both my Patchfoot and Brindleface images. My computer is loaded with viruses, and I can't do anything without 7 different fake spyware alerts popping up in my face. Once I get a new computer, I'll continue working on them. I'd like to keep these two on reserve, because obviously I have done them. Sorry about this! --Goldencloud 17:21, 25 June 2009 (UTC)

Brindleface - Withdrawn


I'm surprised that no one has done Brindleface yet. She just seems like a cat that everyone on here would be jumping on. I had a hard time trying to figure out what she looked like. In all the allegiances, she's just known as a "pretty tabby", on here she's described as a dappled gray tabby, in Into the Wild it says she's pale gray with darker flecks, just like her kits, and we of course have her name, Brindleface. So here we have a light gray cat with a ton of tabby marks a lot of dark flecks. If you have any suggestions, please suggest! Goldencloud 22:26, 21 June 2009 (UTC)

EDIT1 Darkened eye. --Goldencloud 00:54, 22 June 2009 (UTC)

It's confirmed in the books she's gray tabby, like her kits. She is vacker (Swedish word for beautiful). Maybe you can do her queen blank as well. The only thing is that I think she has green eyes. --Bramble My Realm 22:31, 21 June 2009 (UTC)

Yep, page 97 of Forest of Secrets, if you want a reference. --Bramble My Realm 22:40, 21 June 2009 (UTC)

Bramble Okay, thanks! I'm glad the tabby think works. I'd be happy to do her queen blank! And she does have green eyes. I made them more pale, like Ferncloud's. Goldencloud 23:17, 21 June 2009 (UTC)

The only thing is that the green is similar to her gray pelt and it's hard to see. Can you make the green a bit more pronounced? --Bramble My Realm 23:43, 21 June 2009 (UTC)

Bramble Okay, I shall do so! --Goldencloud 00:54, 22 June 2009 (UTC)

It's good, but I'm with Bramble. Change the eye. I actually did have a go at Brindleface, but It turned out pretty horribele so I didn't upload it. (What do you think of my nwe sig? I'm not sure myself.)... -- Minnowberry   Dawnfeather's Den  08:17, 22 June 2009 (UTC)

Dawnfeather I darkened it a little bit, but you're right it still blends in with the gray. Should I make it more saturated? I'm sure your Brindleface couldn't have been too horrible, nothing else you do is. And I like your new sig! Although at first I didn't know who you were. :) Do you want me to keep calling you Dawnfeather or start calling you Minnowberry? --Goldencloud 17:42, 22 June 2009 (UTC)

Nah, Minnowberry is just a name I like. I am sort of obsessed with '--berry'/ Minnowberry, Bumbleberry, Hollyberry, Juniperberry, Iceberry, Smokeberry, Goldenberry, Leafberry (Berryleaf), Brindleberry? Fernberry doesn't really work... Anyways, I like the prefix berry. About the pic, I suggest you just spen some time experimenting wit eye colours until you find the colour that blends in the least. -- Dawnfeather  talk! 07:11, 24 June 2009 (UTC)

I am going to withdraw both my Patchfoot and Brindleface images. My computer is loaded with viruses, and I can't do anything without 7 different fake spyware alerts popping up in my face. Once I get a new computer, I'll continue working on them. I'd like to keep these two on reserve, because obviously I have done them. Sorry about this! --Goldencloud 17:21, 25 June 2009 (UTC)

Medicine Cat Apprentice Blanks - Declined



Lavastream, SunsetClan's Medicine Cat! 00:26, 10 June 2009 (UTC)

This seems fine. But don't color the herbs (?). -- Darkhallows  Lair 02:30, 10 June 2009 (UTC)

I think it would be a good idea to color the herbs. Unless we don't mind the herbs in all the medicine cats' mouths to possibly different colors. -- Goldencloud  03:41, 10 June 2009 (UTC)

I don't think we should colour the herbs in the blanks. The outline of the herbs should be a bit thicker, and should extend a bit further up as if they were in the mouth, not under the chine! A bit of chin has to be consealed by the hearbs to do this. Just put it were you think that the mouth should be, only a few pixels higher. -- Dawnfeather  06:21, 10 June 2009 (UTC)

No, don't colour the herbs; there are so mnay different types of leaves they could be carrying that we may as well leave it up to whoever colours the cat to decide what colour green they should be - it will add to the individuality of each pixel.  Sandy Talk! 11:17, 10 June 2009 (UTC)

This blank can't be accepted, because you edited the apprentice blanks to make these. I'l either decline this, or you can start over from scratch. GB57 22:47, 10 June 2009 (UTC)

GB, we have permission to edit the blanks, and on the forum, 'Do we really need Medicine Cat Apprentice Blanks' we have basically decidec to edit the blanks to put herbs into their mouths and make them Med cats. That's what i did below. -- Dawnfeather  22:59, 10 June 2009 (UTC)

No, we don't. Please see "A Little Misunderstanding...". GB57 23:15, 10 June 2009 (UTC)

??? What did I miss? Lavastream, SunsetClan's Medicine Cat! 23:29, 10 June 2009 (UTC)

K, looks like we can use these after all. GB57 02:13, 11 June 2009 (UTC)

So, Misty, I think if you just thicken the leaves' outline and take out the color, it would look pretty good. --Bramble My Realm 15:37, 11 June 2009 (UTC)

OK, but It will take awhile, I'm not using the same computer. I think GB knows I have more than one. ;) Lavastream, SunsetClan's Medicine Cat! 23:51, 11 June 2009 (UTC)

This? Oh, the last one didn't upload. -.- Lavastream, SunsetClan's Medicine Cat! 02:01, 12 June 2009 (UTC) [[File:Shortfemalemedcatapprentice_copy.png]] [[File:Longfurfemalemedcatapprentice_copy.png]][[File:Shorttommedcatapprentice_copy.png]]

Take out the color, and make them a little less round, more like your original leaves. But I like the thickened lineart. --Bramble My Realm 03:11, 12 June 2009 (UTC)

Opps! I 4got 'bout the color, and I can't make them the way the first one is like. I 4got. -.- Lavastream, SunsetClan's Medicine Cat! 22:21, 12 June 2009 (UTC)

Just take the colour out and make the leaves more pointed; they don't have to be identical to your first ones just less rounded. Also, you nede to do the other blank so that it is the same as the three.  Sandy Talk! 13:33, 13 June 2009 (UTC)

ie. you need to do the longhaired tom  Sandy Talk! 13:34, 13 June 2009 (UTC)

Ugg. The tom got deleted. -_- But will do Sandy! Lavastream, SunsetClan's Medicine Cat! 21:36, 13 June 2009 (UTC)

These haven't been worked on in a week. Please work on them now or they will be declined.-- Darkhallows  Lair 06:25, 20 June 2009 (UTC)

OMG, I forgot! I'll have them in by tomorrow! Lavastream, SunsetClan's Medicine Cat! 12:30, 21 June 2009 (UTC)

Can you guys not decilne it yet? I don't get a lot of computer time anymore... Lavastream, SunsetClan's Medicine Cat! 21:47, 22 June 2009 (UTC)

It's okay by me but you do need to work on them ASAP Mistyfur. If they do get declined then just resubmit them when you've made the improvements.  Sandy Talk! 11:50, 23 June 2009 (UTC)

OK. And I might not be on here a lot cuz of GB. And it's a good reason! =] Lavastream, SunsetClan's Medicine Cat! 12:53, 23 June 2009 (UTC)

It's been said numerous times, please stop making rude comments about GB.-- Darkhallows  Lair 20:51, 24 June 2009 (UTC)

Seriously. It has been 13 days since the last constructive edit to these images. Please edit by tomorrow else they'll be declined in 24 hours. Sorry Mistyfur but we can't just leave them here for an unlimited amount of time as that's unfair to other users who have their images declined after a week of no improvement.  Sandy Talk! 16:07, 25 June 2009 (UTC)

Declined due to lack of work. Please feel free to reupload once improvements have been made  Sandy Talk! 15:41, 26 June 2009 (UTC)

Rusty and Smudge - Declined


Isn't this cute? I am testing the kittypet blanks and they are awesome! Thanks to whoever drew them! Do not nag me about the eye color, it won't show up. I did put green eyes on Rusty and amber eyes on Smudge. HawkfireRock and roll all nite! 15:47, 30 June 2009 (UTC)

Slow down Hawkfire. These can't be put up for approval yet; the blanks they were used with haven't even been approved yet! Technically the same goes for my queen blanks. You could probably put one of them up as an example of how they could be used in the kittypet blanks section, to show how it would look, because your Rusty pic is pretty good. --Bramble My Realm 15:54, 30 June 2009 (UTC)

Bramble's right. These need to be declined until the blanks are actually approved as there may be some major changes made to the blanks before then.  Sandy Talk! 17:18, 30 June 2009 (UTC)

=( yall are right, I am just excited for being accepted into the PCA, and I kinda got carried away. HawkfireRock and roll all nite! 18:46, 30 June 2009 (UTC)

I made these blanks like two months ago. If someone wants to adjust them and put them up for approval, go for it. --Sandiwolf 02:29, October 3, 2009 (UTC)

Leapordfur/star- Declined


Sorry I am making so many charcats, I am just bored :) Do yall think she is too detailed? I think high detailed cats rock! HawkfireRock and roll all nite! 18:53, 1 July 2009 (UTC)

No offense, Hawkfire, but this doesn't have the high quality touch we're really looking for. Try working on a more simple cat, like Talltail, that you have up now. And note: Don't use MS Paint. Her spots are like pokadots... and well, there's not a lot we can do to boost it up to standard, unless you completely redo the image with a program like GIMP or Photoshop or pixlr or something. Though, just so you know, your shading isn't bad at all. :)

Also, should you decide to redo her, use a deputy blank, because that's the only time we really see her as.

Keep trying, Hawkey, you'll get this. ;) --Bramble My Realm 21:09, 1 July 2009 (UTC)


[[File:Cloudberry (warrior).PNG]] I wanted to do a gray riverclan cat, so here's the worst textured cat ever, Cloudberry. (Dawnfeather, notice it ends in -berry :) --Mallinois Cinder-Wolf 16:42, 25 June 2009 (UTC)

I really like the colour you've chosen (and especially the eye). She's not the worst textured cat ever! lol. You just need to thicken it over the shoulder and blend it all more.  Sandy Talk! 21:33, 25 June 2009 (UTC)

The shading underneath the neck is too low, and there is something across the shoulder. however, I love the eye and pelt colours. -- Dawnfeather  talk! 08:50, 26 June 2009 (UTC)

Thickened shading all over, and I'll probably use the dogde tool if I need to. How do you use the dodge tool on these cats to texture them? --Mallinois Cinder-Wolf 13:46, 26 June 2009 (UTC)

With Warriors I get 25 soft brushes and click once or twice on the front and back shoulders and the tip of the muzzle.

The shading on the neck needs to be HIGHER! -- Dawnfeather  talk! 14:32, 26 June 2009 (UTC)

Neck shading higher. --Mallinois Cinder-Wolf 22:13, 26 June 2009 (UTC)

Blend the hind leg shading a small bit more along with the bottom of the tail. It looks very sharp there.--Warrior♥Warrior's Den 19:39, 27 June 2009 (UTC)

I also think she needs slightly thicker shading on the back, tail and head  Sandy Talk! 18:14, 30 June 2009 (UTC)

I'm not going to get around to doing her. --MalOcean 20:11, 2 July 2009 (UTC)

Raindrop - Declined

[[File:Raindrop.png]] I'm busy during the summer, so don't decline if I don't respond right away, even for a week. Anyway, I know I've gotta get working on the shading. What else? GB57 15:43, 27 June 2009 (UTC)

The marking - people said it needs to look more like a raindrop rather than a rectangle. They also said don't outline it in black make it a black and grey marking.  Sandy Talk! 16:30, 27 June 2009 (UTC)

Declined due to lack of work.-- Darkhallows  Lair 08:30, 4 July 2009 (UTC)

Bumblekit Declined

[[File:Bumblekit.png]]I'm finally back! Well I see Bumblekit was taken down like I expected. So here we have Bumblekit up again. No highlights this round (i despise them on kits)just different sets of shading. I looked at some of the other kits for reference.-- ♪Shimmer 22:29, 10 June 2009 (UTC)

Welcome back, Bumblekit! I'd say he looks pretty good, but your shading confuses me. Where is the light source coming from? -- Goldencloud  23:09, 10 June 2009 (UTC)

The shading style looks fine to me as it's what is used on a lot of approved kits. I just think it needs to be darker and slightly bigger on the forelegs.  Sandy Talk! 10:17, 11 June 2009 (UTC)

Well here we are. Finally got me some more free time. I made the shading darker and long on the legs.-- ♪Shimmer 01:54, 16 June 2009 (UTC)

Now you need to blend it into the pelt a lot more to get a natural transition and perhaps make it smaller on the neck  Sandy Talk! 08:20, 16 June 2009 (UTC)

Updated-- ♪Shimmer 23:50, 16 June 2009 (UTC)

Hmmm, he sort of looks like he's wearing a hood with earholes because the shading's a bit large. :) Maybe decrease the shading a little around his head, and on his right side the shading under his chin looks a bit large. Also shade his ears a little. He looks cute otherwise. --Bramble My Realm 02:24, 17 June 2009 (UTC)

The shading on (our) right side seems short. Bring it out so it fill that entire area behind the leg. -- Dawnfeather  09:45, 18 June 2009 (UTC)

Updated-- ♪Shimmer 00:01, 23 June 2009 (UTC)

The new line of shading is really stong. Soften it out a lot. -- Minnowberry   Dawnfeather's Den  06:28, 23 June 2009 (UTC)

There is a line outside of the line art.Minnowclaw 02:45, 25 June 2009 (UTC)Minnowclaw

Updated. Never noticed that line since it got onto the alpha channel. Its fixed now, thank you Minnowclaw. And soften it out....I'm guessing Dawnfeather?-- ♪Shimmer 20:20, 26 June 2009 (UTC)

Yup, it was me, Dawnfeather. Sorry about that sig... Anyway, I think that the shading on the head and the same shading I was talking about before on the shoulder could be softened a bit more. -- Dawnfeather  talk! 22:57, 26 June 2009 (UTC)

The (Our right) right ear looks odd.Minnowclaw 00:31, 27 June 2009 (UTC)Minnowclaw

Declined due to lack of work, sorry...-- Darkhallows  Lair 08:25, 4 July 2009 (UTC)

Redtail - Withdrawn by User

[[File:Redtail1a.png]] I made Redtail as a warrior. -- Dawnfeather  talk! 23:57, 27 June 2009 (UTC)

I'm not sure if I'm accurate, but aren't tortoiseshells like a brown color not gingery all the way and black? Well the color is fine, but I think the ginger tail shouldn't be so dark like the rest of him since it makes him stand out more as having a ginger colored tail. Make it lighter.-- ♪Shimmer 00:11, 28 June 2009 (UTC)

Well can you might add just a little bit of white. And it said in Into the wild that he had a "distinctive" ginger tail. What the hecks distinctive mean?Summer is here!!!!!!!!!! 00:14, 28 June 2009 (UTC)

I wasn't entirely sure what you meant, Shimmer, so I made a second on ewith a lighter tail. Sandwich, distinctive means it stood out, or was special, or something like that. Or it was just definitely ginger. I made him a slightly darker ginger than I would normally use as to make him more 'Red', and masculine. -- Dawnfeather  talk! 02:09, 28 June 2009 (UTC)

In Into the Wild, they say Redtail's tail is as red as fox fur User:AutumnSky

Foxes aren't bright red. They are reddy brown, the colour I've tried to achieve here. -- Dawnfeather  talk! 03:16, 28 June 2009 (UTC)

The deputy blanks are released so I think you should change him to a deputy.--Yai-Girl 14:56, 28 June 2009 (UTC) Yai-Girl

I suggest looking up foxes to see their fur color User:AutumnSky

Here's a picture of a tortoiseshell:]<<Here, AutumnSky. It's not exactly like a foxes, but more darker. The fur color looks fine,I think, but I suggest making the tail a bit brighter so it stands out. Try going over it with the saturate tool one or two times.--Warrior♥Warrior's Den 20:02, 28 June 2009 (UTC)

I would suggest making his body have more brown and/or ginger patches to make the red tail stand out more, as distinctive means special, or unique to that cat. --Bramble My Realm 03:24, 29 June 2009 (UTC)

I'm confused... You're all contradiction each other. -- Dawnfeather  talk! 07:30, 29 June 2009 (UTC)

I don't think we are. Just do what Warrior said, saturate the tail a bit more, and add in a few more colors to his basic pelt so the tail could be classified as distinctive. At least that's all I got from the discussion up there... --Bramble My Realm 16:27, 29 June 2009 (UTC)

Okay, I added more things to it, and it looks a bit more tortie. I also saturated the tail, but I had to be careful to not make it too bright. Is this better? -- Dawnfeather  talk! 10:09, 30 June 2009 (UTC)

Yeah, I like this version better. It makes his tail stand out more and make him look more tortoiseshell. --Bramble My Realm 16:07, 30 June 2009 (UTC)

(M) - I'd still add some white to the other patches. Mosswisker&Stealthfire 19:03, 30 June 2009 (UTC)

M&S, some tortoiseshells don't have white patches. I think this image would look better without them.--Warrior♥Warrior's Den 15:59, 4 July 2009 (UTC)

(M) - I probably should have checked his description first; I thought he was a tortie and white (AKA Calico). So cross out my last post. Looks great! Mosswisker&Stealthfire 16:19, 4 July 2009 (UTC)

Yes, I never pictured Redtail as having white, to be honest. He looks good as he is no, I think. Comments before approval? --Bramble My Realm 21:02, 4 July 2009 (UTC)

Took out the second image; as we're approving the first one. --Bramble My Realm 21:03, 4 July 2009 (UTC)

I have to disagree. while I can't find anything to improve, i don't think that he is good enough to be approved. He just doesn't look right. I may have another go at him, staring from scratch, but I don't want this one to be approved. WITHDRAWING -- Dawnfeather  talk! 09:50, 5 July 2009 (UTC)

Brackenfur withdrawn

Any comments? Criticism is appreciated, as long as it is constructive criticism. Sparrowsong 03:25, 27 June 2009 (UTC) [[File:Brackenfur!.png|thumb|Brackenfur...]]

The line between the shading on the outside is quite harsh. Also, the middle seems to get gradually darker. -- Dawnfeather  talk! 04:01, 27 June 2009 (UTC)

The lineart around the ear, back and hindquarters is blurred slightly.  Sandy Talk! 09:28, 27 June 2009 (UTC)

Make him a little bit lighter since he is a golden brown. Also, add tabby markings. Minnowclaw 12:00, 27 June 2009 (UTC)Minnowclaw

Brackenfur's a tabby, so he needs markings, and there's blurred lineart, plus the hightlights and shading needs to be blurred more. --Mallinois Cinder-Wolf 15:53, 28 June 2009 (UTC)

Yes, as Mallinois said, you need tabby markings and you need it to be blurred more. For examples on tabby markings, you can look at either millie, squirrelflight, or hawkfrost, and what you can do to fix the outline is, on paint, you can either do this:

  1. open and then save the blank you need to your computer
  2. Open the image on paint
  3. go to edit
  4. click paste from
  5. open the blank
  6. make it so that the white is transparent
  7. position the blank on the image and save it

or this:

  1. go to the blank page
  2. press ctrl Print Screen on your keyboard
  3. go to paint
  4. open the image of your cat
  5. go to edit
  6. click paste
  7. make the white transparent
  8. position the screenshot so that the blank overlaps the outline to the image
  9. crop it so that only the cat shows
  10. save it

I thought I knew a third way, but I fogot it while writing the other two. xP Hope that helped. ;) --MUMBLE785 16:48, 4 July 2009 (UTC)

You had this up when you asked to join, Sparrowsong. It's been a week since you edited it. Please work on it by 24 hours from now or it will have to be declined. --Bramble My Realm 21:01, 4 July 2009 (UTC)

I'm withdrawing this. I really don't have time to work on him right now. Sparrowsong 20:49, 5 July 2009 (UTC)

Mallowpaw - Declined

[[File:MAllowpaw.gif]] Yes! I can get on now! O.K. I made Mallowpaw of WindClan this time and I would love some pointers on the shading, eyes and markings. Tortiekitty 23:44, 28 June 2009 (UTC)

Edited it so it's not on a thumbnail. This is pretty good for a first time, Tortiekitty. The tabby stripes need to look more like stripes and be a bit more distinct, because these look like little dark wisps of color. Look at some of the other approved tabbies for reference. He also needs to be slightly lighter, as he looks sort of reddish brown. Shrink the ear pink a little so it's not overlapping the ear, and restore the tail to it's original length (I know why you did it, it said he had a short tail on his article and big blue eyes. I've looked, there's nothing about that in the books. It was an edit from an unregistered user that seems to have nothing better to do than add false details into descriptions. I've found almost 20 more like it.) Anyways, great job on Mallowpaw! --Bramble My Realm 00:29, 29 June 2009 (UTC)

Great job! Just fix what Bramble said to fix and it would like really nice.Summer is here!!!!!!!!!! 01:50, 29 June 2009 (UTC)

You also nede to blend in the highlights as they're very stand-out-ish  Sandy Talk! 16:21, 29 June 2009 (UTC)

This hasn't been worked on in a week. Please work on it in 24 hours Tortiekitty or it will have to be declined.  Sandy Talk! 13:08, 5 July 2009 (UTC)

It looks like Mallowpaw's tail got cut off.--Yai-Girl 23:57, 5 July 2009 (UTC) Yai-Girl

Declined due to lack of work. Feel free to resubmit once you've made the necessary improvements :)  Sandy Talk! 19:45, 6 July 2009 (UTC)

Daisy- Declined


I have been working on this one for a long time. :) well here she is! One of my least fav characters but I guess I will make a charcat out of her. HawkfireMy Den 14:30, 6 July 2009 (UTC)

She looks like she fell into a bucket of ashes. GB57 15:59, 6 July 2009 (UTC)

I think someone else already reserved her...--Warrior♥Warrior's Den 16:11, 6 July 2009 (UTC)

Hawkfire, you need to discuss with Misty which version you're doing and which one she's doing. GB57 16:22, 6 July 2009 (UTC)

As Hawkfire got her Daisy up first, then i think that she should hve first preference. Mistyfur could do the loner Daisy when we get the blank. You need to smoothen out the shading so it is consistant rather than sort of lumpy like it is now. I like the colour you chose, it is exactly the right colour for her. The shading has been placed well. I thihnk that although this has been declined, you should follow thesse instructions and talk with Mistyfur as soon as possible, asking her if you can do this version. It has a lot of potential. -- Dawnfeather  talk! 00:00, 7 July 2009 (UTC)

Okay, Dawnfeather. Misty is this okay with you? I will work on her shading and her highlighting. Then can I put this for approval? Thanks :) HawkfireMy Den 13:44, 7 July 2009 (UTC)

Ashfoot (Queen) - Withdrawing

[[File:Ashfoot.queen.png]] I saw that Darkhallows was doing Ashfoot as a warrior, and Smokeberry was doing her as a deputy, so I thought maybe I'd do her as a queen. Constructments? --Caroline Stimpson Talk! 20:38, 3 July 2009 (UTC)

She's beautiful, but I believe she's shorthaired. Most WindClan cats are. --Bramble My Realm 21:06, 3 July 2009 (UTC)

Thank you, Bramble! I made her short-haired. Anything else? --Caroline Stimpson Talk! 01:09, 4 July 2009 (UTC)

This looks really nice! But maybe blend the shading into the pelt more. =)--Warrior♥Warrior's Den 16:04, 4 July 2009 (UTC)

Thanks! I blended the shading a little more; is this better, or does it still need more blending? --Caroline Stimpson Talk! 16:49, 4 July 2009 (UTC)

Just keep blending and it should look good. Oh and are you using GIMP?Sandwich989 17:22, 4 July 2009 (UTC)

Maybe try adding a highlight to the eye, since it looks really dull.--Warrior♥Warrior's Den 18:08, 4 July 2009 (UTC)

I'm sorry, but I'm not sure how to do Oh, and I'm using Pixlr. --Caroline Stimpson Talk! 19:35, 4 July 2009 (UTC)

For the eye, just use the pencil tool and add a white pixel right next to the pupil. --Bramble My Realm 20:48, 4 July 2009 (UTC)

Do you think you could also make her slightly darker? More like gray and not a light gray color. --Bramble My Realm 20:51, 4 July 2009 (UTC)

Hmm, i haven't comented on anything in a while... Anyway, i can hardly see the shading. Can you make it a bit bigger and the edges (like, outside edges) a bit darker. I aslo agree with Bramble. -- Dawnfeather  talk! 04:46, 5 July 2009 (UTC)

I'm sorry, but I can't work on this image anymore. Withdrawing. Caroline Stimpson 00:49, 8 July 2009 (UTC)

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