Brambleberry (MC) - Declined[]
[[File:Brambleberry.png]]
I drew Brambleberry i know it's not perfect. critism and tips welcomed dearly. --brambleberry 17:07, 17 August 2009 (UTC)
Brambleberry, sorry but were closing this section. We are getting ready for Tweak Week and clearing up the page. No new art is allowed at this time. You can put this back up after Tweak Week. Hawkfire ♫ Go Aggies! 17:13, 17 August 2009 (UTC)
Tadpole - Declined[]
[[File:Tadpole.png]] ok, since scourge didn't work out, i made an easier one:tadpole. how did i do? rainpelt
add/darken shading... --MUMBLE785 23:46, 24 July 2009 (UTC)
Add a tad bit of shading under the chin, head, sides, and lightly on the pars. Blend the ears some more and there's a darker line of pink running through it. Lighten the eyes, as they are hazel, and add a highlight to them. He looks very cute. =)--Warrior♥Warrior's Den 00:20, 25 July 2009 (UTC)
(M) - Also, judging by what you said on Scourge you are using paint, right? Try using www.pixlr.com to edit your images. (Use the burn tool for shading and the blur tool for ...blurring.) ₪ MosswhiskerAndStealthfire 00:33, 25 July 2009 (UTC)
ok, i used gimp to fix shading.-rainpelt
- I can hardly see the shading and there's a part gray background..Theres look like some gray near his left foreleg close to the line art. There's also some near his ears and where his two paws meet his chest.-- ♪Shimmer♫ 01:40, 25 July 2009 (UTC)
i added shading and lightened the eyes and i have fixed the background rainpelt
i worked on shading more, and made the BG transparent, if it dosent show up for you guys tell me. and i also noticed the line art was lightened when i was doing shading, so i fixed that problem, have i fixed it all? rainpelt worked on shading and ears more, no comments in a while, so, i dont know what to do next.
Well, he needs shading on the other side of his body, his front legs and top of head, and your current shading needs to be blurred in more. There's also an extra bit of gray stuck in between the tail and side, get rid of that. --Bramble My Realm 02:08, 26 July 2009 (UTC)
fixed. rainpelt
blurred instead of smudged
did that, and lightened the ears. rainpelt
The shading needs to be blurred into the pelt, to make it look more natural, and less like patches. Plus, he's supposed to be black. Right now, he looks more like a dark gray. Maybe make him a little darker. Other then that, good! Jaypaw189 21:21, 30 July 2009 (UTC) aka Jayie
done-rainpelt
He doesn't have a pupil in his eyes. Fix that and he's looks good. --Blackclaw09 20:51, 5 August 2009 (UTC)
he has one.rainpelt 23:35, 5 August 2009 (UTC)
anything else? rainpelt
Add a white pixel into each eye for a highlight, then you need to redo the shading. It just doesn't look right. Here is exactly where: A thin line of shading on both of his cheeks and on top of his head. A slightly increased size of shading down both of his sides, a thin line of shading along the bottom of his tail, and two lines of shading up one side of each of his forelegs. --Bramble My Realm 20:36, 8 August 2009 (UTC)
the origonal shading was lost when jaypaw asked me to darken thepelt so i will work on regaining that. ok, working on that. original shading was lost when jaypaw wanted me to darken it.-rainpelt
worked on shading a bit.-rainpelt
Okay. Firstly Rainpelt, please sign with 4 ~s as no-one can tell when you last edited. Now for the image: The ear pink is way too big for the ears and is too pale for a black kit. The shading needs to be more of a line as Bramble said above. Look at some of the approved kits (Mosskit, Applekit, Runningkit and Wolfkit are some good examples) to see how are where to put shading. Blend it in and this looks good to go. Sandy~Dragonkit's Forest 19:03, 13 August 2009 (UTC)
I've always had a hard time with kits, I like the color you chose, and Sandy pretty much covered it, the only other thing is that the nose pink is too red.-- Darkhallows Lair 17:28, 17 August 2009 (UTC)
This has been here for well over a week (can't tell for sure just by looking as you didn't timestamp your last message, rainpelt). Please work on this or it will be declined. Sandy~Dragonkit's Forest 13:13, 19 August 2009 (UTC)
Declined due to lack of work. Please feel free to make improvements and resubmit after Tweak Week! Sandy~Dragonkit's Forest 09:31, 20 August 2009 (UTC)
Owleyes (Deputy) - Withdrawn by User[]
[[File:Owleyes.deputy.png]] Hey, finally got him finished. Comments? --HoneyfurBob's Your Uncle! 19:14, 1 August 2009 (UTC)
He's great! All I can see is that there needs to be more shading, and it needs to be more natural-looking, kind of blended. Otherwise, he's perfect!-- Echomist Look out for flying hedgehogs! 01:01, 2 August 2009 (UTC)
- He neeeds much more shading, and the shading needs to be darker. blur the shading more and blur the ear pnk. --Mal Sorrel-Wolf 12:28, 2 August 2009 (UTC)
Nice color! All I see is that to darken the shading, and mayeb brighten the ear pink. It is grayish pinkish. Hawkfire ♫ Go Aggies! 19:00, 2 August 2009 (UTC)
I tried thickening the shading, and, I blended the ear pink more, lightening it, just a tad. I'm trying to make it look like Owlstar's ear pink, so I didn't lighten it a whole lot. Is this better? --HoneyfurBob's Your Uncle! 21:08, 2 August 2009 (UTC)
Sorry for being so picky, but I would thicken the shading even more than what you have now. It needs to look almost 3D, not just like there's a shadow at the edges of the lineart.-- Echomist Look out for flying hedgehogs! 01:30, 9 August 2009 (UTC)
I completely re-did him. I agree with Echomist; the shading was very....strange. Is this a little better? Oh, and you're not being annoyng, Echomist; if anyone's being annoying, it's me, with my stick-thin shading. ;) --HoneyfurBob's Your Uncle! 22:29, 10 August 2009 (UTC)
(M) - His shading's better. Now just darken it and he should look good. Mosswhisker and Steatlhfire 17:42, 11 August 2009 (UTC)
Sorry for the clutter, Bramble. =( I'll try, and get this approved (Or declined) at warp speed! ;) Anyway, I darkened the shading, a bit more. Meh. Looks a little weird. Suggestions? Psst, I will get this shading stuff right, if it kills me! --HoneyfurBob's Your Uncle! 00:38, 13 August 2009 (UTC)
Don't feel bad, Honeyfur. :) The Project's just so popular, the page gets messy, and I was in a bad mood when I wrote that. Anyways, the image is good, he just needs some shading on his tail, hind paws and front leg curve. On the shading, blur it. I'm glad you have a determined attitude; we need that! --Bramble My Realm 14:59, 13 August 2009 (UTC)
(M) - If you're having toruble with the shading, try putting the hardness on your brush to zero - it'll automatically blur! Mosswhisker and Steatlhfire 19:09, 13 August 2009 (UTC)
Or you could use the blur tool, depending on the program ^^. The blur tool is my best friend when it comes to art.-- Darkhallows Lair 17:49, 17 August 2009 (UTC)
K-K. I added the extra shading, and blurred my current shading. It still looks....what's the word for it? Ahhhh, I'll just say, "unproffesional". =) I'm wondering, would the smudge tool work for this? That's the tool I use a lot on my images. Darkhallows' best friend may be the blur tool....but, mine is whole-heartedly the amazing smudge tool! Oh, and, by the way, M&S, I don't know how to alter the brush hardness on Pixlr. I tried seeing if it was the "opacity", or....I forget the word. It was a long word. =P But, it wasn't it. Do you know how, by chance? Oh, and good luck becoming a senior warrior, M&S! You certainly have the potential to be one. --HoneyfurBob's Your Uncle! 21:51, 18 August 2009 (UTC)
(M) - Aww, thanks! *nuzzels you* For brush hardness, click the little down arrow where you change brush size. A box will pop up. You'll see options above the gray line that say things like shape, radie, ect. Go the where it says hardness, then drag the arrow to the left until the box after it reads zero. The picture of your brush should be very blurry. Also, try a brush size 9 or higher for your shading. Hope that helps! ;) Mosswhisker &Steatlhfire 22:12, 18 August 2009 (UTC)
(M) - Try darkending the shading more. Mosswhisker & Steatlhfire 19:38, 20 August 2009 (UTC)
I'm deciding to withdraw him. He just doesn't meet the standards of the wiki. But, I'll be back! ;) --HoneyfurBob's Your Uncle! 22:22, 21 August 2009 (UTC)
Firestar(Wa) - Withdrawn by User[]
[[File:Fireheart269.png]]
Ok! I didn't get to do these guys as leaders, but I have brought back my old Fireheart (updated!) and Bluestar as a deputy. But where's Crookedjaw? Well... I need a little help on him... I don't know how to make the jaw crooked on the Warrior Blanks! So, if you can, please help me! After that's sorted out, I can finish him and put him up. Since my resevations only last two weeks, I stuffed 'em into one thread. xD Comments/Suggestions/Help? --MUMBLE785 22:29, 31 July 2009 (UTC)
I separated it out into different sections. The ear colour is still a bit dodgy, play around with it a bit. Also, (I remember when this was up before it was declined) the colouring technique you have done him in is now more used for mottled cats. I would sayto make him a solid colour, butt before you do, maybe you should gather Sandy's or Bramble's opinions on this (or another senior warrior's, or just someone else's in general actually =D ). I think that the shading is good, you have a good style. -- Dawnfeather talk! 23:22, 31 July 2009 (UTC)
I'll fix the ear, and wait for the other higher-ranked peoples opinions, too. ;) --MUMBLE785 01:04, 1 August 2009 (UTC)
I agree with Dawn. Take away the markings as they look kind of red and it's making the orange a really strange colour. Make the orange less fluroescent too. The shading is great it's just his colour! Sandy~Dragonkit's Forest 12:02, 1 August 2009 (UTC)
This is very good remove the red markings and in my opinion the sheading on the ear is too much. Stonestar 19:51, 1 August 2009 (UTC)Stonestar
Alrighty! I'm on it! --MUMBLE785 23:28, 4 August 2009 (UTC)
I fixed his bolor and took away the tabby markings, but I didn't overwrite my previous image because I wanted to compare them. --MUMBLE785 23:41, 4 August 2009 (UTC)
he looks great maybe darken his pelt a tad bit more. Stonestar 23:47, 4 August 2009 (UTC)Stonestar
Alright. --MUMBLE785 20:49, 5 August 2009 (UTC)
UPLOADED. Compare that... Better? --MUMBLE785 20:53, 5 August 2009 (UTC)
His ear looks a little light to me. The one behind his other ear. --Blackclaw09 21:58, 5 August 2009 (UTC)
The one closest to you? --MUMBLE785 22:02, 5 August 2009 (UTC)
HE LOOKS A LOT BETTER PERFECT PELT COLOR. Oops caps lock! --StonestarStonestar 22:09, 5 August 2009 (UTC)
xD Good. I like him, too. Any other constuctments? (sucky spelling i think...) --MUMBLE785 23:02, 5 August 2009 (UTC)
No, the ear behind the closest ear. It's too dark. --Blackclaw09 23:59, 6 August 2009 (UTC)
Oh! That ear! I'll fix it. ;) --MUMBLE785 18:20, 7 August 2009 (UTC)
REUPLOADED. Better? --MUMBLE785 18:54, 7 August 2009 (UTC)
(M) - Add some shading in the middle, just like you did on Bluefur. ₪ MosswhiskerAndStealthfire 00:10, 9 August 2009 (UTC)
Alright, I'll get on that. :) --MUMBLE785 19:25, 9 August 2009 (UTC)
UPLOADED. Another comparison, Minus another. ;) Better? --MUMBLE785 19:43, 9 August 2009 (UTC)
- xD I am SOOO Stupid!!! Okay, I didn't see Bluefur below Fireheart, and I was frantically searching for her, then I looked in the Approved images, and I found her there, and I had completely forgotten that she was almost Accepted!!! It probably happened because she wasn't in that big list of Accepted images on the Project page... xD --MUMBLE785 19:43, 9 August 2009 (UTC)
(M) - I like the second version better. On both of them, right after the chest shading it suddenly stops like the pencil tool was put on there - you either need to blur that area more, or add shading to it. Mosswhisker and Steatlhfire 17:59, 10 August 2009 (UTC)
kk. --MUMBLE785 20:00, 10 August 2009 (UTC)
REUPLOADED. Wow, that was fast. Better? --MUMBLE785 20:04, 10 August 2009 (UTC)
(M) - Yup! Now just lighten his shading a smidge and I think he'll be good to go. :) Mosswhisker and Steatlhfire 17:40, 11 August 2009 (UTC)
I can't see the ear pink Sandy~Dragonkit's Forest 11:41, 12 August 2009 (UTC)
Kk! I'll make the ear pink a tad bit darker so you can see it better, and lighten the shading. ;) (if he's accepted, he'll be my FOURTH IMAGE!!! @o@) --MUMBLE785MAN-EATING KITTEHS! 17:29, 15 August 2009 (UTC)
om flippin' g. I got photoshop yesterday, and it looks like the lighten shading tool is much appreciated. xD Anywho, REUPLOADED. I made the shading lighter. Is it better? --MUMBLE785MAN-EATING KITTEHS! 18:35, 15 August 2009 (UTC)
The shading's great, but the ear pink is still a bit light. Make it like the shading; except pink. --Bramble My Realm 21:33, 16 August 2009 (UTC)
It's hard to do a Fire(paw, heart, star) because the erin's keep changeing his looks.--Thornpathtogehodou 22:32, 16 August 2009 (UTC)
It's good, but shouldn't Firestar have tabby markings? Jane Volturi (talk!) 16:54, 17 August 2009 (UTC)
Sparrowsong he did have tabby markings but they made his pelt look wierd and stand out. --Stonestar 17:26, 17 August 2009 (UTC)Stonestar
But Firestar is a tabby, is he not? So he needs tabby markings, like the leader version.-- Darkhallows Lair 17:40, 17 August 2009 (UTC)
Try and give him very pale tabby stripes Mumble. Sandy~Dragonkit's Forest 07:31, 19 August 2009 (UTC)
Should this have a warning before we decline it, it hasnt been worked on for a week now. --Stonestar 21:54, 21 August 2009 (UTC)Stonestar
Stonestar's right. Mumble, if you don't ork on this soon, we are going to have to decline it. -- Dawnfeather talk! 00:38, 22 August 2009 (UTC)
Sorry guys!!! My school started and I haven't been able to get on the computer. :P I'll work on him tomarrow, I gtg right now. --MUMBLE785MAN-EATING KITTEHS! 01:07, 22 August 2009 (UTC)
I've decided to withdraw him. I'm probably not goign to have enough time to work on him with school and stuff, and I've started to lose intrest in making him right now. I will be putting up Socks and Scourge after tweak week, and I may put Fireheart back up eventually, but we'll see on that part. --MUMBLE785MAN-EATING KITTEHS! 18:29, 23 August 2009 (UTC)
Brackenfur - Declined[]
[[File:Brackenfur.jpg|thumb]] Here's my first artwork, Brackenfur. I don't know how to get one with a white background and I didn't feel like doing all the work.--Shaf Girl 23:32, 23 August 2009 (UTC)
Looks a bit...small. I'll add the background, though. GB57 23:34, 23 August 2009 (UTC)
Actually, since we're starting Tweak Week, I have to decline this for now. Keep the image, though, and it can be added back. GB57 23:36, 23 August 2009 (UTC)
Foxheart(W)- Withdrawn[]
[[File:Foxheart.warrior.png]] , Dunno what to think on this one. -- Darkhallows My den 05:52, September 10, 2009 (UTC)
(M) - Make some tabby stripes longer and some shorter, and give them different thinkness. Mosswhisker & Steatlhfire 22:51, September 10, 2009 (UTC)
I love this! But the ear pink needs to be larger and more triangular. The shading also needs to be darkened. Hawkey Ready for action 01:16, September 11, 2009 (UTC)
Changed. -- Darkhallows My den 06:09, September 11, 2009 (UTC)
I really don't like this. At all. So yeah, decline this one please.-- Darkhallows My den 09:03, September 12, 2009 (UTC)